Reviewer: TemplarSora Signed
10 Sep 2013
Chapter 3: Part III
I had thought about leaving multiple reviews but...I don't know. The way you write, it's hard to comment on one section at a time because all three parts are so tied together that it's hard to go back and comment on pieces here and there and not think about where they all led.
First off; I am still very new to your Scotty writing. While I *think* I know who Andy is from other smaller writings, the fact that you never say who Andy is was the first frustrating and insanely incredible thing I noticed about this. The entire first part of the story, I had no idea who the narrator was. And the use of a first person style literally threw me into the action; *I* could have been telling the story, for all I knew. A few things here or there made me think woman, a few things here or there made me think guy. Whatever. Then we learn the person's name.
Andy. Really? Just when I think you're giving us something to work with...I *still* have no idea who is speaking. Other than a different name, I still feel like it could be me in that story, seeing these things, doing these things.
And I'm not entirely sure if that was what you meant to do in the first place, but you did it. You didn't make me just connect to Andy and Scotty emotionally, you made me emotionally invested in the action and feels. I'm watching Scotty rip the walls down trying to escape and I can feel my heart breaking for him. I feel that need to escape, to get away by whatever means, and then that anger at being denied when Scotty comes in and rescues me from myself. I feel that need to learn more about my shadow, to know everything I can about this young man that I loved, to do my best to comfort him for all the despicable things that I learn happened to him.
And then, to not necessarily resurrect him...but to at show him some small measure of love in this incredibly dangerous universe.
And then the ending...to know that whatever I...err...Andy did for him, it worked. That that shadow had a light that he showed, even for that one minute...I agree fully with Andy's last thought.
"Yes, he was worth it."
Like I said, I have no idea if that was intentional, or if I'm just reading way too deep into this, but wow. It was frustrating, I won't lie, not knowing who the narrator was, but like I said, the way you wrote this completely drowned me in the story, to where I could have believed the entire way through that it was me doing all of this, that I was Andy. The emotions, the images, the thoughts...
Yeah, you were right. I did enjoy this a lot. Bittersweet ending, too, and certainly makes Inevitable make a bit more sense. Really amazing job.
Author's Response: Thank you. It's the first story I ever typed through tears on. Many I have cried before or after writing, but this was the first one I ever sobbed while I was writing, and predictably, that entire final scene wrecked me. Andy is Andrew Corrigan of the Mirror Universe. In the Arc of the Wolf, the man who has that name is called Corry. Hence the warning at the beginning -- they and their respective Scotts are different, and have vastly different relationships. I'm glad it drew you in. And that it held you there. Thank you again; this one took three days to write and tears on a keyboard.