Reviewer: mdgarcia Signed
30 Jul 2012
Chapter 8: Chapter 8
I wanted to wait until I reached the end of the entire book to offer up a review of the story. So, here I am and here it is:
Clearly intended to leave us hanging on what's going to happen with Donald and the Amon, the method of his return... and now the Baron somehow either rescuing Lia at the last minute or perhaps doing something else to bring her back (or maybe perverting her memory by creating some other construct) definitely drive a bit of a knife into the back of the reader as they close the back cover on this story.
It's written with the usual flair we've come to expect from you.
I loved the story, the character conflicts, the dialogue and the inner monologues of the various characters through words and actions, I feel that this is the most exciting story yet. I really liked the tie-in with the other UT series, and the mentions of the backing that Sandhurst had from other captains and admirals gave it that feel of being more than just one ship and one crew. I liked how you handled Jellico and Glover a great deal, though the latter's treatment of Donald was a bit perplexing to me. Glad Pava was there to explain it all away. T'Ser is really coming along as a deeper character within her new environment on Gibraltar/Europa, and I'm really happy to see her pushing her personal envelope toward the end with her dealings as a Captain with the Vexam's acting CO. I thought it was very spot-on for my involvement in getting to know her during Chains.
Now that I've lavished a lot of praise on you, let me proceed to deflate you a bit :)
I felt very strongly like the whole of the story might've been a bit unbalanced given the buildup; the cliffhanger ending should've been more of a chapter break than the end of the first story. When I got to the end on my eReader, I literally said to myself, "That's it?!" There's way too much left hanging up in the air for this to be a proper novel completion, to me... I had hoped to find out the method of Sandhurst's return to Europa in this novel rather than waiting for the next one, so at least we had some closure to the immediate arc. But now with Ojana's insecurities, the arrival of Pava, the promotion of T'Ser, Vexam's role in the mission, and so on and so forth... I dunno. This is a huge break from your other stories so far, but I wonder if it's a bridge too far in asking for this level of suspence until the next story.
Regardless of the above abrupt ending, I'm very eager to read what comes next, so you got me there. :) I sincerely hope you're already producing the next one, because you cannot leave us hanging like this for long. So hop to it!Author's Response:
Mike, thank you as always for the well considered feedback.
I’m glad you enjoyed the story, and although I realize that I did end this tale abruptly, it was my intention to create a cliffhanger-like situation that would compel (and hopefully propel) readers into the next story in the series.