Real name: Miles Saunders-Priem
Membership status: Member
I live in Darlington UK, I'm 20 and I'm completing a degree in mathematics with Open University. Every week day I spend five hours studying the maths. On Tuesday, Thursday and Sunday I go skateboarding in a skate park located in Redcar. The skate park is called R-kade. Nearly all of my spare time is devoted to writing stories for my series. Everyday I spend at least three hours writing and checking my stories. I've quite new to story writing (been doing it about a year now) and with each story I write I discover a little more about writing.
DS9 is my favorite Star Trek series!
Hobbies: Skateboarding, Killer Sudoku, Sudoku, building K'Nex guitars, computerized chess, building Lego cities and of course story writing!
Any questions about my stories or my series, email me at MSPriem@gmail.com .
Here is also the chronological list of the stories from my DS9: the continuation series:
Secrets and Lies
Ménage à Trois
Tip of the Iceberg
Running the Gauntlet
The Price of Sanity
Cloak and Dagger, part 1
Cloak and Dagger, part 2
To be Over
The Good, the Bad and the Ugly
The Order of Things
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Expanded Universes
Series: Star Trek: Sigils and Unions
Completed: Yes Word count: 3125 Read Count: 549
Date: 20 Jun 2011 Title: Chapter 1: A Weaver of Lives
Wow that was surprisingly gripping for a obituary style story. It made the Tekeny Ghemor character more interesting, because I personally think in the DS9 series, Tekeny Ghemor was one of the more weaker secondary (recurring) characters. His primary role was simply to develop Kira's character.
From a plot point of view I like it how Natima has overstated Ghemor's importance and popularity amongst other Cardassians. This is typical of obituaries trying to make the person in question more larger than life.
Of course one of real Cardassian 'heroes' was Damar, he went from Dukat's loyal right-hand man, to leader of Cardassia to freedom fighter. Without Damar the Cardassians would never have revolted against the Dominion in the final stages of the Dominion war. The Cardassians would have fought to the last man against the Federation, Klingons and Romulans.
Thank you for reading. :-)
You and I couldn't disagree more about Tekeny Ghemor; I found him a most compelling character even on the show.
Natima Lang certainly used flowery language in the obituary, as is typical--but I'm not so sure she overstated what Ghemor did in his life. Ghemor wasn't one of the revolutionaries and couldn't be, because of his exile, and his untimely illness and death. However, where I think his influence is going to show more is in the postwar era, and through the people he left his mark on. Especially his cousin, who becomes no less than the Castellan (commander in chief) of the postwar Cardassian Union.
I cannot see how this piece diminishes Damar in any way. Damar had a heroic arc, yes. But this wasn't about him.
Part One of the Star Trek: Gibraltar series
The aging starship Gibraltar is brought out of mothballs to assist in Federation humanitarian relief operations within Cardassian territory in the immediate aftermath of the Dominion War. The crew quickly discovers not everyone shares the Federation's vision for Cardassia's future.
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Categories: Expanded Universes
Characters: Ensemble Cast - USS Gibraltar
Genre: Action/Adventure, Drama, Mystery
Series: Star Trek: Gibraltar
Completed: Yes Word count: 46818 Read Count: 14612
Date: 17 May 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Wow! You destroy star ships with style, I like that! Nothing like some descriptive action scenes to engage the reader.
Much obliged for the kind words! :-)
Date: 17 May 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
That scene with Sandhurst and Ramirez is sort of reminiscent to Sisko encountering Kira for the first time. Both Kira and Ramirez don't want to be in their respective posts, but I'm not sure how much Ramirez hates the Cardassians (so there the similarities end).
I'm glad to see we're off and not going to be bogged down with more crew or main character introductions. Even so I wonder if the Cardassians could really wage another war against the Federation giving that most of their planets were brutally attacked by the Dominion/Breen and most of their people slaughtered.
Also would the Romulans take such a hostile approach to managing their portion of Cardassian territory when there is the Federation between such territory and the Romulan Star Empire? Surely strategically the Romulans would be fools to cheese off the Federation and Klingons as there position in occupied Cardassian space could be so easily cut off...
Ramirez definitely does not want to be aboard the ship. She had her career mapped out, and this little detour wasn't on it.
The Cardassians are in no condition to wage a conventional war against the Federation or its allies, but they can certainly entertain the idea of fighting asymmetrically. And the Romulans aren't being outright hostile, just not as cooperative (or communicative) as they were during the war.
Thanks for the terrific feedback!
Date: 17 May 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
I like this Urlak fellow; he came off cold and calculating from the start with his offer to Inish. Glad to see your bad guys hitting the mark straight away...
He's a bad dude, to be sure, and certainly not someone to cross lightly.
Date: 18 May 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
'arclight shoulder-fired missiles' ; a rather cool little weaponry feature! Honestly the occupied Cardassian territories sound like Iraq or Afghanistan with insurgents lurking around everywhere, and numerous terrorist attacks. Very modern and rather clever I think in mimicking such topical features of the 2010's (war on terror and so forth) into your story.
I also like Sandhurst's down-to-Earth approach (very Sisko-like) and the fact there are more older faces in the senior crew. Too many times in Star Trek did the senior crew look young or too youthful; so your senior staff characters are a nice little break from Trek tradition...
Indeed, Iraq and Afghanistan served as my inspiration behind the situation in post-war Cardassia. A proud, militaristic people are not just going to roll over and accept Federation and Klingon 'supervision' without putting up a fight, despite the fact that crews such as those aboard Gibraltar and Sojourner are genuinely trying to help.
Date: 22 May 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
These Cardassian insurgents are cunning and devious. I was going to ask how photonic mortar shells could penetrate through shields when you brought up the DST device. The leaders of this insurgency certainly know how to cause some serious damage to Starfleet positions in the area. This also gives a glimpse at how potentially resourceful the Bajorans were during the Cardassian occupation; if Cardassians were putting up with an insurgency (of a similar scale shown in this chapter) for dozens of years, no wonder they eventually left Bajor.
Well, the insurgents didn't even have to use the DST device for this, Starfleet hadn't yet had the time or resources to harden their ground-side C-in-C building from in-direct fire from above.
Thanks again for the commentary!
Date: 26 May 2012 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
Ho ho! I didn't realise Larâ€™ragos was part of Guinan's race! That explains Lar'ragos' comments on serving as a soldier for some empire 400 years ago.
Yes, Lar'ragos is a Listener of Guinan's El Aurian species. He's quite a bit older than he appears, and a good deal more dangerous than he appears as well.
Date: 26 May 2012 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7
Gosh things are really messed up on Lakesh. Cardassians killing Cardassians, I'm surprised the Federation just doesn't pull out of Cardassian territory and let the Cardassians fight it out. I say this because the Cardassian extremists you write about don't seem to care if their people get killed or not (especially the ones who have 'sided' with the Federation). I also wonder if that pathogen causes permanent nerve damage to all the people it affects; if so I feel really sorry for the crew of the Phoenix. One day you're a Starfleet officer, the next you are dependent on life support for the rest of your life. Heavy man.
The damage caused by the insurgent pathogen is permanent, barring Starfleet Medical conjuring up any miracle cures (which is unlikely). And things are about to get even more delicate, politically speaking...
Date: 26 May 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8
Urlak is insane. He really underestimates the Klingons in that they will probably wipe out most of the Cardassians given half the chance. Especially if the Cardassians fight back (which a few of them are). Urlak's strategy will probably mean the death of most surviving Cardassians. Urlak presumes the Federation and Klingons will go to war over Klingon atrocities. I think the Federation is just going to sit back so as to replenish its tactical assets. It will avoid a war at all costs, especially with the Klingons, and if a few million Cardassians are killed. Well I don't see the Federation taken some serious action to prevent such an extermination...
Question; just how many surviving Cardassians are there? Millions? Tens of millions? Hundreds of millions?
There are billions of surviving Cardassians on Cardassia Prime, and millions more are still eeking out a living on their shattered colony worlds throughout the Union.
Date: 28 May 2012 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9
What a nice way of getting rid of Gul Panor. Just what he deserves for trying to destroy a whole bunch of rather defenseless transporter ships...
I'd agree that his end was well deserved. Karma prevails in this encounter.
Date: 28 May 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10
Hmm... Sandhurst pretending to be something he is not by actively engaging with his injured subordinates. Lar'ragos was right about captain's keeping a cool head and trying to sell it to the crew that everything will be alright. But I think Sandhurst should find his own style of command and just have more faith in his abilities; bonding with the crew can come later.
Sandhurst's trying to find his own command persona under less-than-ideal circumstances, to be sure. Here's hoping he lives long enough to settle into one. ;-)
Date: 28 May 2012 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11
Love the Klingons, and I'm glad to see K'Vada is your classic bloodthirsty, warrior-driven, cunning Klingon of old! That last scene was a bit reminiscent of The Way of the Warrior were Dax and Sisko are discussing about the Klingon presence around DS9. I bet K'Vada travels with a few dozen ships (all of which are cloaked) when the need arrises for some additional firepower...
K'Vada definitely hedges his bets. He's as cunning as he is lethal, which is bad news for the Cardassian insurgency... and the Cardassian people in general.
Date: 30 May 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12
Cool! Starfleet TacNet, 24th century Facebook for Starfleet officers? A nice touching moment with Ramirez and Lar'ragos, I liked that lull after all the battle and death. Good to see Ramirez is not some obsessive arrogant prat looking for promotion and she has a heart and a conscience.
Really digged that village battle scene to. It was like something out of Indiana Jones or one of those action movies... Cool idea using hoverbikes; reminds me of the zoomers in the PS2 game Jak 2.
Date: 30 May 2012 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13
You tell him Ramirez, you tell him! Ramirez has got some balls confronting the captain like, even so more have a go at his best friend. As for the Klingons you write them the classic way: nasty and crazy conquerors with little in the way of humanity. The best way! The more I think about about K'Vada the more I realise he is a bully; I'm certain he wouldn't be halve as gung-ho if he didn't have such a commanding position.
K'Vada may not be a bully in the traditional sense, but you're correct insofar as he's careful to stack the odds in his favor.
And Ramirez is... well, she's herself, and Liana will never be a timid wallflower. ;-)
Date: 30 May 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14
This was a good story that got into the meats and bones of the Allied occupation of the Cardassian Union. There was no dithering around at the beginning with introducing crew members, neither did you expand upon every main character which is a good thing as it leaves some mysteries, interest and questions for later stories.
That was one tight plot with twisted villains, dubious characters, heroes and learning-the-ropes captains (and more) all thrown in. You know how to write a good plot I'll give you that. I presume from this story the big three are Sandhurst, Ramirez and Lar'ragos. Nice work with Lar'ragos as I feel he is the strongest character of them all. A mixture of Guinan, Kira Nerys and Odo all lumped together. Guinan because Lar'ragos is El Aurian, Kira because Lar'ragos has been a soldier and committed some terrible things, and finally Odo because he's sort of like the outsider. He knows things and has had a long life. Lar'ragos is like the exact opposite of Guinan.
I feel sorry for the Cardassians though, they are really screwed and fighting back against the Federation and Klingons (especially those turtle-headed maniacs) is only going to send them further into misery, despair and great loss. Your Cardassian Union is literally like Germany post World War 2, except the Cardassians have one government however weak whereas the Germans had two: one for West Germany the other for East Germany.
For one snazzy plot, ballsy topics, interesting characters, cool features (and props like those hoverbikes), descriptive writing that left some images in my mind, bad-ass Klingons, Lar'ragos, moxy and intriguing politics, I give this story 4 and a half stars.
A good way to start off this series!
I'm very pleased that this story was so well received by you. My intent was to show how complex and messy the situation in the Alpha Quadrant was immediately following the Dominion War, seen from the eyes of a Starfleet crew who were not the best and brightest.
Many adventures lay ahead for this ship and crew.
Thank you again for the fantastic feedback on the story. :-)
Generation-1 has arrived...
Chapters: 228 Table of Contents
Categories: Original Series, Alternate Universes
Characters: Ensemble Cast - TOS
Genre: Alternate Universe
Warnings: Character Death
Completed: No Word count: 362507 Read Count: 105995
Date: 27 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Star Trek: Phase One
I'm going to be making some sort of rolling commentary, reviews for each chapter. And I have to say I'm loving this, it doesn't even feel like Star Trek, but it's so engaging already! You sort of throw in Star Trek names, place in completely different situations and yet write these characters sort of the same way. It's crazy, and I love it!
Date: 27 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 2: Star Trek; Phase One--Part 2
These humans are just like today's humans. And that senator seems exactly like today's congressmen. I haven't watched TOS, but I knew Kirk was a womenizer of sorts, but in this story you take it to new levels. I don't know how you do it but you keep this story engaging... I like it man...
Date: 27 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Star Trek; Phase One--Part 3
This gets more and more interesting. I like your take on how humanity started to unite together. That reference to a radically reformed UN was very interesting, and it seems nations are coming together by sharing their military with other nations as part of this Armed Forces treaty. Sort of like NATO today but far more involved and grouped together, very interesting... And Chekov is now a girl! Unless it is his sister... Great stuff!
Date: 27 Aug 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Star Trek; Phase One--Part 4
Cool way of introducing Khan, and throwing in Weyoun's name like that...
Part Two of the Star Trek: Gibraltar series.
Dispatched to investigate the disappearance of a Starfleet vessel, the crew of Gibraltar find themselves embroiled in a mystery whose significance catches the attention of the upper echelons of Federation leadership. As forces beyond their comprehension converge on the enigmatic Pierosh star system, Captain Sandhurst and his crew must seek to unravel a tangled web of lies, plots, and divided loyalties that could ultimately spell doom for the entire quadrant.
Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Categories: Expanded Universes
Characters: Ensemble Cast - USS Gibraltar
Genre: Action/Adventure, Drama, Friendship, Mystery
Warnings: Adult Language, Violence
Series: Star Trek: Gibraltar
Completed: Yes Word count: 62721 Read Count: 20669
Date: 27 Jan 2013 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6
For some reason Lar'ragos steals every scene, even when he's dreaming, though I wonder if what he is dreaming bears any relation to this threat (in the real world) or the development of the story, or if it is a chance to throw in some character development?
Date: 05 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
"Tark laughed appreciatively" isn't that a bit cold-blooded even for a Tellerite? Larâ€™ragos may seem paranoid but given his background he is sadly right: the Federation is vulnerable to attack by other aggressive species. But I think Lar'ragos underestimates the will of other Federation members to defend 'paradise' no matter what the cost.
It was clever of you to use a holodeck program to start the story; you had me fooled there for a moment! Mildly intriguing last scene; I presume it sets up the plot for this story. Some mad science experiment about to go wrong but some powerful (and shady) people/factions/groups have vested interests in it.
An interesting opener to your second Gibraltar story...
Thanks, I'm glad you like it. This is a very different story from Embers, but one that reveals a great deal about many of the crew.
Date: 11 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2
I always like Pava, and with each story a new mystery abounds; like all those scars and stuff. Of course I guess with him being a soldier for a very long time, he would have taken all sorts of crap. No wonder the poor bloke is uncomfortable with checkups. I enjoyed that scene with Sandhurst slaving away on the treadmill. You burn that pudge up Sandhurst, burn it you fatty! Poor Sandhurst, I'm surprised he's fit to command after that gruelling session of exercise (I'm thinking mental tiredness caused by excessive physical exertion).
Ha! "Burn it you fatty!" That's likely what Ashok was thinking. :-p After what happened to the crew in 'Embers', Sandhurst is thinking (rightfully so) that being in better physical condition might be of significant benefit.
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3
Sandhurst man, I still feeling he is tentatively learning how to be a captain. But a least he did the right thing letting Ramirez sort out Lar'ragos. Though I doubt she will get through to that grizzled, paranoid old wreck...
The parts involving the Temporal Investigations Agency were fun to read, somehow whether in film or book, temporal stuff (related or otherwise) always comes off as interesting to me. Nice little irony with that Past Prologue book; a book of the future about the past...
Lar'ragos has lots of layers, as you'll soon discover... but grizzled, paranoid old wreck is not too far off the mark. ;)
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4
Ashok's in deep doo; the ship only managed warp 8.3...
Nice use of those Son'a subspacial weapons. Plus Kutav is shaping up into a nice little villain, Orion as well... There's something you don't see every day.
Kutav's less a full-fledged villain than an opportunist whose got a strong sense of which way the wind is blowing at any given moment. I'm glad you like the character, as he's always been a favorite of mine.
Date: 25 Jun 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5
"Sandhurst did a full rotation in his chair to assess the condition of the bridge and crew"
For some reason this conjures up to me an image of a man spinning around in his chair and it's so funny! The man goes round, swivels round; I just think it would look so comical!
This plot gets stranger you know, some kind of trapped energy being, that man in the last scene. You definitely have a flair for the surreal, makes a nice change from the almost non-stop action scenes.
The action in the story ebbs and flows, but I like to think that it's surreal throughout! Thanks for the commentary. :)