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Summary: Past Featured Story

An entry for the TrekBBS challenge in November 2008. The theme of the challenge was 'survival'.

This short focuses on a chapter of history from Caitlyn Ryan's past, a character who appears in my USS ACCIPITER series.

During the Cardassian / Federation wars a Federation crew are captured and endure a living hell in a secret Cardassian prison camp.

Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Expanded Universes
Characters: None
Genre: Drama, Horror
Warnings: Adult Situations, Violence
Series: Accipiter
Completed: Yes    Word count: 3008    Read Count: 1958
[Report This] Published: 29 Jan 2009 Updated: 29 Jan 2009
Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 1: A Question of Survival

I remember the first time I read this, last month or so, and it made me feel quite fierce. Well-written, though very disturbing at times, it's definitely a lot of punch in a relatively small amount of words.

Author's Response: Thanks Nerys and SLWatson for your reviews. It was a bit raw for me too upon writing because it is a tale I need to write for the character of Caitlyn Ryan to explain just how driven she is. So when I sat down to write this for the challenge it was done in one sitting. It just came out in a furious rage. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Reviewer: SLWalker Signed
Date: 03 Jul 2013 Title: Chapter 1: A Question of Survival

Since I rec'd it, I read it again. And again I am gobsmacked. It's no easy thing to read: In fact, it's really damned hard and ugly and real and painful. It's every bad thing I've ever heard of governments doing, and Caitlyn Ryan is right in the worst kind of hell, with everything torn from her.

Except, not. Because again, and again, she keeps this thread of rationality, of courage, of determination and willpower and guts, and at the very end, she turns it all around. I remember feeling fierce then, and it makes me feel that way now years later. Brilliant writing, Kev. Just brilliant.

Flawed Like Me by Terilynn    Rated: K+    Liked  Reviews (7
Summary: Star Trek: Heritage
Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Next Generation, Expanded Universes
Characters: Riker, Cassidy, Riker, William
Genre: Drama
Warnings: None
Series: Star Trek: Heritage
Completed: Yes    Word count: 1448    Read Count: 1613
[Report This] Published: 29 Jan 2009 Updated: 29 Jan 2009
Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 of 1

Cassidy is beyond intriguing. All of your characters are engaging, but Cass is the one that I've been drawn to since the beginning, constantly curious to see what she would do and why. It's not hard to see where even a charmed life, or a seemingly charmed life, had many moments in it that were anything but. Overall, though, I can only hope that in the end, she doesn't turn out to be a villain. Good stuff, Terilynn!

Author's Response: Thanks Steff: I will only say that she's been a real enigma - even for me. Cassidy has a very finite and extremely unforgiving sense of right and wrong. There is no such thing as a gray area for her... Rikers never do anything small.

Summary: Past Featured Story

2384: As the Alpha and Beta Quadrants continue to recover from the Dominon War, Starfleet moves ahead with the launch of a very special ship, the USS Pearl. Based on the unique design of the Enterprise-C, the Pearl is assigned to Captain Henry "Hank" Harrison and dispatched to a colony on the outskirts of the Federation, New Haven, to investigate a suspected Maquis plot.

What Hank and his crew discover is something far more dangerous ... and destructive.


Star Trek Chronicles Book I cover

Chapters: 30    Table of Contents
Categories: Next Generation, Expanded Universes
Characters: Ensemble Cast - USS Pearl, Harrison, Hank
Genre: Mystery
Warnings: Violence
Series: Star Trek Chronicles
Completed: Yes    Word count: 79408    Read Count: 66486
[Report This] Published: 29 Jan 2009 Updated: 23 May 2009
Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 19 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

“Furthermore, feel free to run engineering like a circus for all I care,” he got up and threw up his hands, “just make sure the job gets done!”

Seriously: I fangirl Hank. I want to nominate him for the best Captain of the decade. For as wonderful as some of the other OC captains are, Hank just owns my soul.

Author's Response:

I'm glad he's so loved. Thanks.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 29 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20

Oh, geez. I would probably get teary if Daren and his friends ended like this. I think the psychology Daren was practicing (forcing someone to face on depression) was probably bad juju (my best friend is a psychologist!) but I would really like to see them live to find out whether or not that's the truth. But it's a brave move -- I love that he was an engineer and a doctor, those are hard disciplines to bridge, even though at heart they follow some of the same practices. ::laughs:: I guess in part because the mental makeup of engineers and doctors tend to be rather different, on a core level.

But it's a good chapter; it squeezed my heart to think of them dying, and that takes some talent.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Copied from the Omega Sector:

I really like Harrison. He's got kind of an edge on him, and I think I like best that he allows his officers to do their jobs (like Chris) without butting into it. I also like the homage to the Enterprise-C; it's fitting, and poignant.

This is a good start. Your pacing is nice and quick, without being too fast and therefore losing itself in the speed. The style is also very clean, which is a big bonus in your favor -- this is actually cleaner, writing wise, than most Trek novels currently put out. All of the characters introduced so far come across as real and alive, and you've set up an excellent mystery. Nice work so far! It may take me awhile to catch up, but I'm enjoying what I'm seeing so far.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

The camaraderie between Hank and Nick is really well handled. The dialogue there seems both real and natural, something that can make or break a story. I got a kick out of them kind of spelling out Bearrian's name -- how often do you see authors who actually pay attention to such human subtleties like that? But the whole conversation was just good... they seriously did seem like they'd been friends for a long time, even if we've only just met them ourselves.

I also like that these people are kind of a crew of independent thinkers, especially since they're NOT exactly the cream of the crop. While I love the famous Enterprises, I really love underdogs, too.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

The flashback was very touchingly done. Seriously, so far this is just an excellent story. Hank's thoughts as he goes through this first day of command on his new ship is very realistic, and you paint a vivid picture of what the ship looks and feels like. The ending of Chapter 5 made me laugh out loud -- what better way to send off a somewhat diamond-in-the-rough crew than with rock'n'roll? Because that's what I would have chosen myself.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Bearrian's another good character, and his relationship with T'Kel is another one that's a lot of fun to see. You really do write interactions very well. Plus, you've got enough intrigue in there with what T'Kel's gonna do about her marriage to keep it interesting. Good work!

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

You're right, Chapter 7 is just awesome. I laughed out loud a few times. I love how you make these people so very relatable; I'm not a fan of wholly original crews, but I'm very much a fan of the Pearl's.

This line got me laughing:
“One of the few things I will agree on with my mother…that ale is good.” She began to devour her food while Hank laughed, covering his mouth with his forearm. “What?” she said with a fry hanging from her mouth. She quickly saw it and ate it. She had an annoyed look on her face. “What are you laughing at?”

And the ending of the chapter was even better. I like how Hank relates to his crew; you could say that it's like Jim Kirk, but it's not -- there's none of that high-handedness that Kirk had. Instead, he really comes across as someone who it would almost be natural to be loyal to.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

I like the way that poor Hank had to come to grips with the fact that this wasn't a scenario, but the real deal. I mean, I knew it pretty much instantly, but it was still neat how he ended up getting smacked across the chops with it. Also liked the battle, which was well-paced, and Harrison getting all fired up on Jennings later. Good stuff!

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

The colonists are a really good lot, too; your ability to create living people never ceases to amaze me. I like the political system, too; representative democracy, but much closer to what it should be than the current one of the United States. The power's much closer to the people. The characters are all pretty good, too; a fair mix, and Daren's friendships are rather real, as well as his relationship with his son.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Slower than most of them, but still with its highlights. The holodeck simulation was interesting, and Tony's kind of a likable fellow, if not a bit of a mild jerk (not everyone can be nice!) But the notion that you can't redo a battle's a good one.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Woot! Intrigue! Well-written intrigue, too; you bring up a whole lot of interesting points with it, and make your reader cast about trying to grasp what's going on. Who could be the mole, who could have really engineered the virus, who's beaming the bodies down. Fascinating!

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 01 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13

Kerling continues to own bigtime; talk about a great lesson he played out. Hank remains as endearing as ever, and the intrigue just continues on, though Nick and Bethany talking with Hank still had a neat kind of camaraderie to it, even as they speculated. May just be that I suck at mysteries, but I am still clueless as to who it could be. But that's a good thing!

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 29 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Copied from the Omega Sector...

Well, I'm getting there...

More mysteries; seems to me that the EPS conduit would somehow be related to the mole hanging around, but it could be a red herring, too. Chris is still entirely cool, but that's no surprise. Good work!

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 29 Apr 2009 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Well, I am now all caught up! The revelation of the nanoprobes was just very, very cool; it made sense, and then there's this very, "Oh, shit!" factor that goes with it. I thought Nick was a bit hard on Chris, but seeing the kind of pressure he was under, that's entirely forgivable. I think that the hostage negotiation (which was surprisingly light-hearted) was also a lot of fun.

The battle with the Warbirds was well-played, especially the slamming impact of the last line of Chapter 19. Overall, it's still a great story -- you do have a lot of minor spelling issues, ie, words that the spellchecker wouldn't catch (fair instead of fare) and that sort of thing, but it's still entirely well written. If you were to go back through and catch those word misuses, I could easily see this being published; while the Pocketbooks tend to be rather lackadaisical at best much of the time, this is a genuinely fun story that would win a lot of people over if given the chance.

Of course, getting that chance is hard. But regardless, you've done a marvelous job so far.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed Liked
Date: 31 Jan 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This story kicks off the saga of perhaps one of the most engaging original crews ever. This storyline in general is a good mix between hope and grit, walking the fine line that is hard to do well... and trekfan does it very well. The very essence of Trek, and maybe the first all original cast I've ever fallen in love with. The Pearl's crew are people you can and will love.

A Weaver of Lives by Nerys Ghemor    Rated: K    Liked  Reviews (9
Summary: Past Featured StoryIn 2376, Cardassian ambassador and freelance journalist Natima Lang reflects in the new op-ed column of the Cardăsa Star-Sentinel on the life and influence of late dissident Tekeny Ghemor. Through the words of Ghemor's family, friends, and colleagues, she reveals the man to Cardassia as he truly was, not as the Obsidian Order would have it...
Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Expanded Universes
Characters: None
Genre: None
Warnings: None
Series: Star Trek: Sigils and Unions
Completed: Yes    Word count: 3125    Read Count: 1909
[Report This] Published: 29 Jan 2009 Updated: 29 Jan 2009
Reviewer: SLWatson Signed Liked
Date: 19 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 1: A Weaver of Lives

What a poignant piece of journalism. It has no objectivity, but still reads in a similar style to a journalistic piece; part that, part touching biography. Macet's cursing insult at his cousin made me laugh; Tekeny's kindnesses to kin, workers, friends and neighbors was heartwarming, to say the least.

The way it was woven from beginning to end, as well, speaks of some extremely lovely writing. I've always admired your dedication to this culture and showing it as so much more than we were able to see most of the time, but it's always a true pleasure to dip into it again whenever I have time.

My only grammar comment is that colons are given the same weight as periods, and so the first word after a colon should be capitalized. But that's a very trivial thing, in an otherwise superb tale.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading. :-)

Ambassador Lang doesn't pretend any objectivity in this...that's why I think she preferred other biographers to handle the chronology-building and straight reporting on the events.  While she used journalistic techniques to get the information she needed, that's why she filed her report in the op-ed column.  (I also imagine that with Cardassia just getting the beginnings of a free press, they're going to be VERY careful about marking the fact that this is an opinion piece, which is why I marked it more times than the site I got my style template from.)

I enjoyed letting Macet say his little piece about Dukat.  I'm sure he's been holding that in for many, MANY years, and now that the [expletive] is burning in hell, perhaps even literally... ;-)   (Can you IMAGINE every time he's wanted to go off on somebody thanks to the resemblance?  "NO, DAMMIT!  For the LAST f-ing time--observe the beard!  I AM NOT Dukat and I have NOTHING in common that narcissistic man-whore of a head case!")

Tekeny's give a LOT of credit to Lawrence Pressman for bringing so much to the character.  When I watch "Second Skin," I really think it was Tekeny's love that affected Kira the most, not anything Entek ever threatened her with.

About your grammar comment...if you're going by the APA Manual (and some of your comments and PMs make me suspect you would), you'd be right.  However, various style guides give different advice and the subject seems to be triggering a lot of arguing on grammar-forum threads I Googled.  Personally, I prefer not to.

Sacrifice by Nerys Ghemor    Rated: T    Liked  Reviews (3

They have given every last reserve for the freedom of their people. Now, a Cardassian resistance fighter and his daughter face the final test of their spirits. And though no eye may behold and no scanner may detect its presence, there is hope and there is triumph even in this desolate place...

(November TrekBBS Writing Challenge entry.)

Chapters: 1    Table of Contents
Categories: Deep Space Nine, Alternate Universes
Characters: Dukat, Skrain (SigCat), Dukat, Ziyal (SigCat)
Genre: None
Warnings: Adult Situations, Character Death
Series: Star Trek: Sigils and Unions--Catacombs of Oralius
Completed: Yes    Word count: 1577    Read Count: 1348
[Report This] Published: 29 Jan 2009 Updated: 29 Jan 2009
Reviewer: SLWatson Signed Liked
Date: 25 Jun 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Sacrifice

You know, now that I've had a chance to interact with him far more, this story is a real heartbreaker. I mean, it was powerful the first time I read it, but now? It feels like closing the book on such a deserving man's life, even though he holds true to his own inner flame right to the end, without him being given the proper goodbye in a warm, sunlit bed with all his loved ones nearby.

Mind, I wouldn't dream of saying it should be changed; I understand tragedy and that sometimes even the most deserving don't get their just rewards. But this hits so much harder now.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading this.

Oddly enough...this is actually the first thing I ever wrote with my AU Dukat.  I really wish his ending could've been different.  I wish he could've lived longer.  And the irony is, his life is even shorter than the canon Dukat's...yet I think his short life meant SO much more than his canon version's ever did.  (At least, before he ended up frozen in rock in the Bajoran Fire Caves.)  And most of all, I wish Ziyal hadn't had to see her father die in her own last minutes.  But sadly, I knew that with their respective physiologies and metabolisms as they were, that it could happen no other way.

It's always tough to read back on it.  But at least he has found peace.  To me--this isn't the ending chapter: it's my hope the reader will imagine him gaining the heaven he believed so strongly in.  And aside from his cousin Akellen Macet, who will survive him, and the two colleagues who are almost like brothers (Marritza and Damar)...most all of his loved ones are already on the other side and have been there for 18 years.  So even if they're not there on this side, as he dies...they're most definitely waiting to receive him. 

Vedek Tora may have captured and killed him...but she never defeated him.  And his justice...will come where she can never touch him.

And what they did with the bodies later, in "Captives' Ransom"...they made a mistake.  They thought that would disturb his soul somehow by just dumping the bodies...but they made a mistake.  Someone finds them and lays them to rest in a more proper manner.  And someday, when the Occupation is over, I think they'll finally disclose the location and let people come to pay their respects.

But this story is why it meant so much to me in the Round Robin to write the vision AU Dukat has when he goes to the edge of heaven with Captain Riker: he doesn't know it yet, but the reason he feels so comforted and at peace at the Fireplains of Revakian, able to focus on traversing from life to afterlife, is that this will be his final resting place.

So they failed in that, too.  They helped him in a spiritual battle (one, paradoxically, in his past!) rather than hindering him.

That was something I really needed, because does bring tears to my eyes to think about how this happened.

Embers of the Fire by Gibraltar    Rated: M    Liked  Reviews (129
Summary: Past Featured Story

Part One of the Star Trek: Gibraltar series

Embers Cover Art

The aging starship Gibraltar is brought out of mothballs to assist in Federation humanitarian relief operations within Cardassian territory in the immediate aftermath of the Dominion War. The crew quickly discovers not everyone shares the Federation's vision for Cardassia's future.


Chapters: 14    Table of Contents
Categories: Expanded Universes
Characters: Ensemble Cast - USS Gibraltar
Genre: Action/Adventure, Drama, Mystery
Warnings: Violence
Series: Star Trek: Gibraltar
Completed: Yes    Word count: 46818    Read Count: 44507
[Report This] Published: 30 Jan 2009 Updated: 07 Apr 2009
Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Since it wasn't fair what was done to Hope Station, here's the feedback I left originally on Embers:

The organic nature you take right off with Sandhurst is a great start. He immediately comes across as being an individual, and not just a cookie-cutter one-off character. Right down to his former packrat mentality, and reluctant acceptance of command. And the anxiety that goes with a command.

The destruction of the Sojourner, for the most part, is horrific. I could only imagine the shock and terror that crew felt right before the vast majority of them were killed. You did a great job writing it, if it made me cringe and shake my head in shock like that.

Finally... hm. Broad-shouldered, black haired, (mostly) brown eyed, genius engineer. ::grins:: Case precedent suggests Sandhurst will be an awesome, awesome character.

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I very much appreciate you taking the time to re-post your original feedback here.

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

“I’m going to need you to be a bit more vague.”

Fabulous line! It made me laugh out loud. The introduction of the Gibralter was, of course, one of those moments where I grinned. Except for the somewhat derisive tone some of her crew was taking towards her -- the TOS fan in me got all indignant at that.

Shaping up to be a great story!

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Wow, talk about a setup for disaster. I don't even particularly want to consider what's gonna end up going down with the Gibraltar. Great intro to a big threat!

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

You've got a pretty good mix of people, it seems, to start off with the senior staff -- no perfect folks, but strengths and weaknesses. Juneau looks really interesting at the moment, but then again, 'problem children' usually are. I also like how you noted that the horrors of war no longer have the same impact on Sandhurst they once did.

Continually good work!

Reviewer: SLWatson Signed
Date: 14 Feb 2009 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Talk about a warzone. Very realistically handled!