Date: 04 Sep 2010 17:49 Title: Chapter 1
A terrific look into the first few hours of Sydney's command. She's chomping at the bit to get underway, but finds Adirondack marooned in the queue at Starbase Plague.
The unexpected delay gives her time to play head games with herself, and even the introduction of the Vulcan junior engineer under her command serves to remind her she's still living in Sutek's shadow.
You've got just the right touch with your characters, not too heavy, nor too light, but enough to give your readers the essentials while keeping your narrative flowing. Well done!
Date: 03 Sep 2010 19:08 Title: Chapter 1
VERY nice look at Sydney's first day of command. You put her through quite the emotional roller-coaster even with their still being in spacedock and have put out quite a few mysteries I really want to get to the bottom of.
And I love your description of the warp core--I never really liked VOY's set design but here you make it so much more likable just by the way you describe it. :-)
Author's Response: I was actually afraid I put too much in. But there's enough space for her to deal with it...and other mysteries. ;)
Date: 07 Aug 2010 11:28 Title: Prologue
This works as a great introduction to the stories of Sydney's career as captain. After all, Sutek was a rather important figure in shaping her command abilities, albeit the inherent abilities she had and learned from her family too. It is also another 'interesting' development for Sutek and Sydney dynamic. Yet again, she is singled for special attention from her one time mentor.
Author's Response: Things will get more interesting as we go along. At least, I hope! ;)
Date: 06 Aug 2010 22:48 Title: Prologue
Sutak must be getting sentimental in his old age. ;-) I realize the more likely case is that he feels a particular sense of accomplishment with Satterwhite, seeing as she served most of her career under his tutelage.
This was a nice little glimpse into the inner workings of one of Starfleet’s finest. Nicely done.
Author's Response: Thanks! :)