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Reviewer: Nerys Ghemor Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Jul 2010 03:33 Title: III. (and the time of death is every moment)

Having Bashir wind up at death's door was an excellent "blind" for what was really going on--that this Bajoran medic actually lured them to the Defiant.  I was left with a lot of questions in the end...whether he was a willing traitor or not.

The only distracting thing about this passage is that "Terran" is another word for "human."

Overall though, this was still a very effective passage.  I like the pattern of prayers you're setting up throughout the story--not only is Kira growing herself, but so is her experience of faith.



Author's Response:

Thank you again! I've been really looking forward to receiving these reviews for each chapter - it's definitely made my evening. :)

I actually debated opening this section up into its own story, which would have let me flesh out some of those unanswered questions, but I think the shorter version works here, ambiguity and all.

And you're so right about "Terran"! I noticed that it was jarring early on, made myself a note, and promptly forgot to change the name.

Thank you for reviewing!

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