Date: 29 May 2015 09:34 Title: Chapter 5
Okay, now I understand that the past two chapters were attempts to find the catalyst and fix the timeline.
I'm glad they were able to restore the timeline, and that Tom, B'Elanna, and the Captain all ended up back where they were supposed to be, but at what cost? The Voyager was never supposed to be in that sector of space as it was, so I can see them wanting to fix the timeline to give the other beings the disturbance in the timeline hurt a chance to be restored.
Why couldn't they restore the timeline to a time before the Voyager was even there, thus sending the ship back to where it was supposed to be and giving them the chance to make a different decision next time, though whether they would remember where they had been or not is hard to tell.
Overall, this was a very interesting story. I will look forward to reading more of your work. I want to go back and read some of the middle chapters, now that I fully understand what was happening.
Date: 29 May 2015 09:27 Title: Chapter 4
The first part of this chapter doesn't ring quite true to me. I know Janeway needs every single person she has, but I don't think she'd be able to trust Ro enough to let her anywhere near the bridge or any other parts of the ship where she could continue to betray them.
Although, I am not really sure what's happening here, as Janeway was dead in Chapter 2, on her ship, and now she's alive and well again. This story is raising lots of questions, and I only have another chapter or two to find out the answers. Off to the next...
Date: 29 May 2015 09:21 Title: Chapter 3
okay, now I'm a bit confused. I can't tell if this is a dream, or some sort of alternate universe they've entered, but it will be interesting to find out what is going on.
Your writing is good, but you leave out a few words here and there, making it a bit hard to read.
I don't blame the doctor for looking death and destruction in the face and wanting to react with violence. It won't help anything, but it is a very human response.
Looking forward to reading more.
Date: 29 May 2015 09:08 Title: Chapter 2
Guardians of the Temporal Prime Directive--that's an interesting concept. I've always had a bit of a quandary about the Prime Directive. As in, how do we know the Krenim's, in this case, were not meant to perform that experiment and set themselves back in time, and along with that, how do we know that by going back to change it, we aren't forcing the future we want, and not the one we are meant to have? How do we know we aren't winning our futures at the expense of other beings?
The Temporal Imaging Chamber is like a huge choose your own adventure book or something. I agree with Tom that he would have to be a focal point, since he is there.
I have to wonder though, wouldn't they want to work backwards in putting the pieces together. How will they be able to tell where Square One is? And if they erase Tom, will that restore him and the Voyager back to their own timeline, before they ever got the ship thrown so many light years away? Or would it simply erase Tom, and by extension, the rest of the ship, from existence.
Date: 29 May 2015 08:58 Title: Chapter 1
So, within just a couple of paragraphs B'Elanna and the Captain are vaporized, and the ship is apparently being attacked by persons unknown.
I feel so bad for Tom, having just gotten close to B'Elanna and then losing her. And I'm sure the loss of Captain Janeway was a blow to the ship as a whole.
I understand Tom's need to DO something--anything to help the ship and to make their deaths mean something. That's a hard place to be, and it sounds like what Tom has to do is dangerous, but I know why Tom feels the need to do it as well.
I'm curious as to what the USS Relativity is doing in the area, and why they haven't offered the Voyager assistance. Are they in some sort of temporal anomaly? Have they entered an alternate dimesion?
Off to read the next chapter and find out.