Date: 03 Oct 2011 02:36 Title: Chapter 4
Ross seems awfully sure that it takes very little for the Cardassians to turn against the Dominion. I'm not sure if he already knew that Damar's rebellion was on the way, or not yet, but if he wasn't--Ross was gambling with his guessing. And since it was (especially unofficially), he plays with Damar's life and the success of Damar's plans. Not wise to talk about it all, because the Dominion, no doubt, listens carefully.
Now, Kira's words are not surprising at all, considering her resentment, even though they are cruel. I wonder how she would feel seeing that the Cardassian people got what they "deserved" (although I disagree that slaughtered by the Dominion civilians, including children, ever deserve that for their military's crimes).
Date: 03 Oct 2011 02:26 Title: Chapter 1
That sounds harsh. Not only lack of compassion for slaughtered Maquis (it almost sounds like the officials hold them responsible for everything that happened, including Cardassia's alliance with the Dominion, which I'd rather blame the Klingons and their invasion of Cardassia for that), but also harsh treatment of the surviving once. While they should face some consequences for their attacks and unlawful actions, it could have been delivered by the president in a batter manner.
Date: 06 Sep 2011 12:40 Title: Chapter 1
Very good. It certainly has the feel of a brief news story on an important event. I especially like the nod to Voyager, as they're the last colony of Maquis left. In addition, I thought the assumption that they are still "murderers, thieves, and assassins" to be particularly good; they don't have too much contact at this point, so they assume the worst naturally.