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Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 11 Sep 2011 20:20 Title: Hurt the Ones You Love

Trouble in - well, it is not paradise - in purgatory?

Like with another story of yours, one of the issues is the multitude of initials. And yes, I get that that part is canon, but it is awfully confusing in printed form. The Q, her Q, the other Q and it can get a bit dizzying at times. There are probably a few solutions for this. One could be simply done with formatting, perhaps italics for John de Lancie's character, and whenever that character speaks? Just a thought. It is not your fault, but it does detract a bit. Just my two cents.

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