Date: 30 May 2013 16:55 Title: Chapter 6
Ha! First, I love the quoted line from above to excuse the not laying out the escape of the ship. True it is irrelevant and not necessary. Mind I would have liked a little more in the balance stuff about Limis' future although I liked the fact it was duked out between two Admirals and that was a great way to tell it without any exposition.
I'd have liked to have had seen Kozar and Limis interaction upon her reinstatement to the ship and how that all played out. That had to make for some interesting dynamics. Of course, we're still left with the future working together and just how those dynamics will play out now after he usurped her control.
And of course, we see that the information had long felt reprecussions. Again, it is neat how you endeavour to dovetail things with DS9. That cannot be easy to try to do. So job very well done.
Date: 02 May 2012 09:40 Title: Chapter 6
I like this story. It borrows a lot from other stories in Enterprise and Deep Space and combines them brilliantly. I like that Mirren dies from the torture, it adds depth and shows not everything can go rosy for a starfleet captain.
What I also love is the fact that you have a marquis and starfleet crew, like voyager, but unlike VOY you don't have them all forgetting their origins in the second episode, there is still some of that friction. I'm sure this will develop well in the future.
Another thing that I love is the tie in and explanation to Deep Space Nine, in my opinion the best ST series on the screens.
Excellent work, well written and brilliant described.
Author's Response: In terms of the torture and death of Mirren, I wanted to go a different route in terms of how torture is portrayed on television. The person being tortured doesn't suffer any permanent damage, he blurts out the desired information, and the heroes are able to avert disaster just in the nick of time. It doesn't always work out that way in real life. With that in mind, I recently added an extra scene where the crew is depicted verifying that Mirren's information is accurate, creating even more of a "Moral Dilemma" for Kozar relieving his captain of command and still acting on this information.