Date: 30 May 2013 16:07 Title: Chapter 1
Have I become the enemy I seek to destroy. I think in my original review and wondered about the parallel to A Pale Moonlight episode inly my reckoning here is that we're not going to quite get the emotional character development reset we got in DS9 with Sisko's hand wrangling over that affair. Instead, Limis is a woman of action, of cause and doing what is right in the moment and it seems here by sstory's end even though it is the beginning she may well.
I like stories that take the approach of showing the end and then lead us up to that moment. Always enjoy figuring out the journey rather than the destination and given the cost of the battle just given an account of there to start precedings the information must be fairly important if Limis is of the opinion it was worth such losses.
Should be interesting to see where it goes from here.
Date: 01 Dec 2011 17:11 Title: Chapter 1
Yes that is so much more better! The modified chapters, five and six, finally bring a more satisfactory closure to this story and tie up all the loose ends. Good job! Not only that the whole story is now better off for it. I'm going to be doing something similiar with Secrets and Lies, adding new scenes, making it more complete.
Author's Response: Upon careful consideration, I wanted to depict the crew at least the accuracy of the information Mirren gave with his last dying breath. I was somewhat disappointed with the aforementioned Enterprise validated the propaganda on the use of torture despite Picard's assertion in "Chain of Command" on the reliability of physical torture as a means of extracting information.
Date: 28 Nov 2011 15:12 Title: Chapter 1
Another good episode (and that's what I'll call your stories because they are so like TV episodes of Star Trek). I personally thought Limis was right to get that information out of the Cardassian. I mean the Cardassian only suffered for what a few minutes? Limis got her information, because that Cardassian was taking it with him to his grave.
Even so I think there is a definite monster inside of Limis, by monster I mean when she is under pressure, when she needs to accomplish something, and many lives are at stake, she'll result to virtually any means to accomplish that something. Limis is just like Kira Nerys in that respect, though I wonder after the war how Limis is going to return to some sort of normality.
Limis is right when she says each death she inflicted makes a little part of her die. The way she acts is like she is in a shell, and her true feelings: the guilt, the despair of losing colleagues and so forth, just gets buried all the time.
You did a good job with Kozar as well, I dunno why but I felt like punching him when he took over command from Limis. He kept her in the dark about that one...
p.s. when are you going to add those extra scenes to chapter five?
Author's Response: These stories basically are set up like single hour-long episodes (with a few more recent a lot longer). It's mostly a story of having to make those tough decisions in war and was mostly inspired by "In the Pale Moonlight" when Sisko tries to convince himself he can live with the guilt and shame, but he really can't and the Enterprise episode "Anomaly" when Archer nearly suffocates the alien prisoner to learn what he knows about the Xindi. Of course, there's going to be hell to pay in later stories a la Duras's grudge against Archer. I should have the revised Chapters 5 and 6 ready to some time next week. After giving it some thought, I wanted to provide a more concrete resolution than in this version.
Date: 16 Sep 2009 11:55 Title: Chapter 1
Oh very interesting start. I wonder what the captain did. I guess I'll have to read on to find out. But I think that in a short segment you set up the gritty harsh realities faced aboard a ship battling against the Dominion. No big glory or heroic moves. Just duking it out one hard punch after the other. Good stuff.