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Reviewer: Robert Bruce Scott Signed [Report This]
Date: 19 Apr 2021 11:28 Title: Part 2 - Shattered: 39

Love the line "Just channel the worst parts of your personality and you should be fine..." That should be on a tee-shirt somewhere.

Just a few paragraphs above that you have "thought" where it appears you meant "taught" (father teaching him how to pilot a shuttle)

And now Lif-prime gets to lead a battle against some version of Star Fleet - or so it appears at the moment. He's going to need access to some more lively Krellonian expletives for this job.

Thanks!! rbs

Author's Response: Things are certainly not looking up for Lif. This is just not his week, I guess.

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