Date: 10 May 2020 22:28 Title: Part 1 - Splintered: 31
Good description of space battle - which is particularly difficult to write. By keepign a tight focal point you made the battle easy to picture.
I particularly like the more bite-sized length of this last chapter. Much easier to keep track of when the scroll isn't too long.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Yeah, I try to keep chapters manageable to maintain a good pace through the narrative but from time to time you come across a big event that just requires a few more words to do it justice properly.