Date: 02 May 2020 20:19 Title: Part 1 - Splintered: 29
Aternate universe action sequences are notoriously hard to write just keeping track of which version of which character ended up where... Which is also the fun of these sequences. Nicely handled.
It looks like your spell-checker bit you in the first paragraph. I suspect you intended to write "...it was a far cry..." instead of "...it was a fry cry..."
Nice to see this forum coming back to life - it's been dead for awhile.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review and good spot. I went and fixed that.