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Reviewer: CeJay Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 24 Jun 2018 12:31 Title: Chapter 1; A Grandfather Bestows a Gift; Stardate 2309.100

That's a nice little prologue here, particularly liked how you connected the two scenes which take place years apart.

My only recommendation would be regarding formatting. It is generally accepted to add a line break after a paragraph when posting stories here and in most other online places. Makes them much easier to read in lieu of having indented text.

Great start, curious to read more!

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