Date: 26 Jul 2013 06:12 Title: Bodily Complications
The horror and trauma of seeing the slaves was really well played here. And good on Molls for standing up for T'Vel like that. I kind of agree with her lecture to McGregor, but only time will tell just how much method there is to this madness.
On the other hand, I do still suspect Harris. And love him though I do, there is something kind of skeezy about McGregor going to bed with someone he holds rank over and rescued from slavery.
Date: 01 Jun 2013 17:55 Title: Bodily Complications
Wow, that was a shocking and tense chapter. I expected the slaves, but I didn’t expect them to be in such horrible shape. When Judith got there and smelled that rancid smell I thought Thad really had crapped himself but, no, he had been keeping people beat up and locked up for weeks. What a mess this has all become. Everyone was affected by this and the reactions to it all were proper, in my view. Once the slaves got transported off, everyone had to deal with the fallout. All of it exploded in arguments and poor Harris, she was just there to witness it all: she had to be the most shell shocked of all.
The argument between the senior staff was well done but Dexter’s actions are leading me to believe he’s the mole. The way he insists on knowing everything, the way he forced the inoculation on T’Vel (which I think is going to send her over the dark edge into some crazy lady stuff) and the Gunny went down … he seems to be the mole to me.
McGregor’s explosion on his staff was a welcome break in his “mad captain” routine as Molly put it and now, with him really serious about the reality of all this, knowing how deep it is, he’s finally gotten it through his head that he can’t hunt down T’Hos for just vengeance alone. He has to do it to help the innocents the man hurt, the innocents that were hurt in that hold crammed with 30 people. McGregor lost sight of that in his quest for payback and his little speech to the senior staff applies just as much to him as it does to them. I think he’s realized this now as he’s going to go and put an end to this particularly cruel situation T’Hos is participating in.
Let’s just hope he can do before the bomb goes off.
Date: 06 Dec 2010 13:11 Title: Bodily Complications
Okay, first of all, the portrait of the slaves and their conditions that you painted ... wow. I think you pretty much nailed that, and it was VERY uncomfortable to read. Those poor people ... and I also felt for the crew of the Kestrel, having to see it. Their distress was palpable.
I have to say, I like that you aren't afraid to make Captain McGregor morally ambiguous while still generally being on the side of right. It is thoroughly creepy to me that he apparently found Yeoman Harris in circumstances such as these, played the savior, and now she is both his Yeoman and his lover. I mean, that's pretty messed up! But still, we see that he is passionate about making sure justice is done here. And we also get to see him play the hardass captain with his senior staff! That was quite the catfight between the officers, but all of them had valid points and complaints. I am struck by how consistent your characterization is even while in the middle of these very dynamic situations. (And as an aside, why do I think T'Vel is about to become a HUGE problem?)
Speaking of characterization, I like Submino. He has a potty mouth, but "fuck me to the power of ten" is an awesome line. It's so Submino and yet still such an engineer thing to say -- and a perfectly natural reaction to finding a BOMB on the main plasma conduit! Yikes, complications for sure! Great stuff, can't wait for more!