Date: 25 Jul 2013 04:57 Title: 'Dirt Side'
Molly is so damn wicked here. I love the law enforcement lean, given my somewhat extensive experience with the field. The descriptions of the locale and people please me, too; none of the shiny matte-painting style worlds for you. Something more real and grimy and true.
Which is, as I said before, terrific and subversive.
Date: 31 May 2013 18:29 Title: 'Dirt Side'
And so we have Cutler going on his first away mission ever! And then we have Jex fumbling over him like a new mother … that can’t be a boost to Noah’s confidence and he desperately needs one following the many weeks he’s been blaming himself for what happened to the ship (no thanks to McGregor). Speaking of McGregor, he’s going on an away mission too (screw protocol!) and offering Noah a compliment (say what?) and … well, he’s dressed as per McGregor’s usual eccentric standards, though this time those standards look to be actually useful.
Anyway, the away team arrives and you’ve described us a very back alley planet. It seems to just be as nasty and murky as the word “back alley” conveys. Everyone on the team splits up and their individual missions should make this stop very interesting. I love the way you’ve identified what each team is going to do and how you’ve split them up. I find myself struggling with that sometimes in my own writing but you’ve given a nice template here to follow.
Ah, and the bar scene (there seems to be one in every chapter … drinks on McGregor!) is really nice. Molly is getting Noah acquainted with the way things work on the border and her explanations of what everyone is doing, and what she is doing, are welcome and well done.
Poor Noah must be thinking the worst of this whole thing.
He might be right. I’m hoping for a badass moment here for him that way he can rise to the challenge and show McGregor that, though he may be a noob at some things, he has the potential for great things. I really just want him to have a moment of win because the guy has had it rough from day one on this bird.
Date: 01 Dec 2009 07:10 Title: 'Dirt Side'
What a treat to get a look at one of these border worlds. Such a dark, gritty environment. It actually reminds me a lot of one of my favorite anthologies in the history of ever, "Thieves' World". Poor Noah is so out of his element, and we get to see a side of Molly we haven't seen before. I could really picture this dive in my mind. Great stuff!!
You must have been to some shabby places! ;)
Glad you liked. I had fun conjuring it up. Sadly, it's not the only dive the poor Kestrel crew have to visit in their duties. Must check out this Thieves' World. SOunds like it could act as some inspiration. Yup! Noah is so out of his depth he needs scuba diving gear.
Date: 15 Jul 2009 10:22 Title: 'Dirt Side'
Oh, God, poor kid. It's not like I don't wanna smack him myself by this point for continuing to be so naive, but still. Being everybody's punching bag like this... Ouch. ::winces::
Nice world building there. Starfleet border patrol is obviously a very different line of work than what we're used to seeing. This reminded me a little of 'Gambit' in TNG, only more realistic and gritty. And Molly of course is priceless! :D
P.S. I say sell him! Need the information anyway. ;-)
Border patrol is the dirty end of the stick - or viewed as such by many in the fleet. But only cos they do have to deal with the dirtier, grittier side of things. But I have to say, I like roilling in te dirt with these guys. A lot of fun.
Molly is priceless! Thank you for thinking so.
As for our punching bag, when he continues to be a little whiney it is hard not to want to smack him. Maybe McGregor had a point? No? Yes? P.S. I think McGregor might be rubbing off on you a little if you condone the selling. ;)