Date: 01 Aug 2013 17:52 Title: Chapter 1
This is such a lovely portrayal of friendship. Andy with T'Shae, who is a little puzzled by it, but is seeing the benefits. And, of course, with Scotty. Like a lot of great writing, it isn't hit you over the head obvious.
Subtlety seems to have always been your strong suit, and it shines through here. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope then when I tackle the less than subtle stuff -- as I've started -- I don't fall flat on my face. <3
Date: 17 May 2009 12:48 Title: Chapter 1
I can't believe nobody's reviewed this one yet, and I wish it hadn't taken me so long to figure out where it was filed. This is still one of my very favorite Corry pieces for some reason--I think the intensity of his emotions is something that very much appeals to me, and seeing that juxtaposed against the rigidity of Vulcan is a very striking thing indeed.
One thing that I believe I told you before that was really remarkable to me was also the way you portrayed the Vulcans in your story. They are certainly quite unemotional, but they also manage to come across as likeable, not as the pompous jerks they can so easily become.
They actually seem very considerate of Corry, even in the small details of what they say: stuff like making sure to state that the new program they were devising was more appropriate for his physiology, very carefully distinguishing that from anything that could be seen as casting aspersions on him as a person in general or as a human in particular (from a psychological standpoint). Though it had to be very, very disappointing to Corry, I thought it was good of them to make the point that it was simply that his body shut down, not that HE wasn't good enough.
T'Shae really comes across as likeable, even though she has that very Vulcan demeanor--she's not arrogant and I get the feeling that even though she's very comfortable in her ways, she has a genuine interest in learning about Corry's.
I also loved the deep connection Corry shows to his family, the way that he sends Scotty to check on his mother and make sure she was all right. And ya know, I kind of wonder what THAT interaction was like, from Scotty's point of view, to realize he'd been trusted with such an important family task like that.
(And of course the reference to that "new-age movement" was GOLD.)
One last thought popped into my head. I find myself wondering, for some reason, what it would've been like if Corry had been put in the Round Robin instead of Scotty. Not in terms of skill sets--I think you made the most logical choice where that was concerned--but in terms of interpersonal dynamics. The closeness to family, the energy, and the openness of emotional display...well, suffice it to say he's reminding me of a young version of a certain somebody... ;-)
Author's Response: Thanks much! And I've never been entirely comfortable writing Vulcans, but have tried to take a balanced and fair view of them -- not the bigotry in Enterprise, nor the other extreme. Just something that seemed fair and honest. Likewise wanted to show that there was some mutual learning going on there, and am very glad that came across.
I imagine Scotty wasn't really comfortable going to Maine (this predates 'Time'), but like all things asked of him by Corry, he does so and carries it through admirably. Be there no doubts that he takes that with the utmost seriousness, even if it does scare him for a long time.
And LOL! at the idea of Cor in the RR. That would be interesting, though I'm not quite sure in all the same ways you think. It would depend a lot on his age.