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Reviewer: CeJay Signed [Report This]
Date: 27 Jun 2014 03:35 Title: Chapter 3

Very interesting, a warp program born out of desperate necessity and based on the observation of Romulan starships passing by.

Prime Directive concerns are always a pain but considering this is a warp capable species, I'd say that Jessica has enough of a reason to justify getting involved. Not sure if Starfleet Command will agree.

Really liked the alien perspective here even if Gorem needs to work on his manners. Looks like the man has never asked for a favor in his life. And this is a pretty big one.

Author's Response: I pictured Gorem being a bit...xenophobic. Which...yeah...why send the xenophobe out on a First Contact mission?

Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 26 Jun 2014 18:36 Title: Chapter 3

What I particularly love here (and it's a very small part of the piece), is that the gestures are unknown and alien, and they may very well mean their opposites. This is very true of human culture. Hold up your index and pinky fingers in Italy, in the US, etc., and you'll get far different interpretations. There is no reason at all to believe that smiles, nods, etc. would ever be interpreted the same way.

And, yay, they can communicate.

And even better, this may be something that Sonia and Jess can actually work together on. It's not friendship, but it's a start.



Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the gestures! It was hard keeping them all in check; I think I proofread it fifty times before I even sent it to my wife for a beta-read. I didn't want to have to build an entire language from scratch (thus the aliens speaking English in the text...subtitles?) but I figured I could still make them alien enough. And yeah...Sonia and Jess...*sigh*

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