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Reviewer: FalseBill Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2014 12:15 Title: Chapter 1

That was a hard opening and yet it suit Jessica style of command to have that sort of service for lost crew though you have got me worry you're going to take someone else Jessica loves away from her.

Now you give us an interesting opening, and signs that Seymour might have found a good women but with the foreshadowing it does seem might be all for nowt. I do wonder what Jessica put in his performance report about his many shortcoming.

Good Job.

Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2014 11:05 Title: Chapter 1

Ah, will Trin change our bad boy Ops Officer? And who's responsible for those deaths?

I'm going to go out on a limb and predict that Seymour's innocent in all of this. But he'll be rather easy to suspect....

Reviewer: CeJay Signed [Report This]
Date: 22 Jun 2014 05:11 Title: Chapter 1

I love me a good in medias res opening and this one strikes hard. Somebody important died and in a very bad way. Like poor Jessica has not enough of a hard time already.

I like the first hints of the other plot lines as well. Jessica getting a chance at a possible first contact and everyone knows those are always fun. Especially the many ways they can go horribly wrong.

And then there is the ongoing Sonia problem who much to Jessica's added misfortunes has suddenly found himself another reason to stay on the Rafale.

This is promising to be a fun story. Looking forward to it.

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