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Reviewer: FalseBill Signed [Report This]
Date: 06 Oct 2013 17:55 Title: Chapter 8

A good and interesting scene between R’Shraan and Captain McAfee, you succeeded in giving the colony history without turning it too much into a data dump scene. So I give you kudos for doing that.

I do think that perhaps Espinoza should of tried harder to stop the Captain beaming down but then it is TOS era, when Captain always goes down first.

Then the scene of slowly exploring the outpost and finding the bodies, and the little signs that all the powers sources have failed, including the local vegetation.

Then an excellent choice of a cliffhanger with the Excalibur seeming to lose power.

Reviewer: CeJay Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Oct 2013 00:18 Title: Chapter 8

Ooooo, very ominous. And Chang's diagnosis, all the life energy sucked out of her body, feels very much like TOS era Trek. You're doing a great job of capturing that nostalgic feeling.

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