Date: 16 May 2013 05:29 Title: Chapter 2
I like their chemistry. I also especially like how you describe their physicality and mannerisms. It makes them very real.
Author's Response: Thank you! It's a lot of fun, especially since we can't see it on screen, writing down the little physical tics.
Date: 16 May 2013 03:29 Title: Chapter 2
Oh, Neva. Oh, Scotty.
I love this pairing. She's playful and smart, but not overbearing ... and Scotty has it bad for her. He knows he has it bad for her. She knows he has it bad for her and she has it bad for him and ... it's just awesome.
Onto the chapter: Loved the way Scotty and Neva got out of the line of fire, at least briefly, and made their way onto the subway. That's where Neva gives us all we need to know about the Orion Slave Girls and what's happened to them and what she thinks. I liked her thoughts on the matter, liked that she didn't try to defend her way of life but that she accepted it for what it was.
I think Scotty admired that in her.
The dynamics between the two are strong and I like the undertones of play and seriousness, in perfect balance with one another. It doesn't drift too far into one side or the other, but strikes a nice middleground.
Author's Response: It was an absolutely fascinating thing, writing two very opposite viewpoints in that scene on the train. I tend to lean more towards Scotty's view, but I really got what Neva was saying too. It's an interesting thing, especially when you consider other cultures, and how they view their own selves. And yes, the chemistry fell into place pretty much all on its own. Thanks!
Date: 16 May 2013 03:28 Title: Chapter 2
LOL! He's in trouble, indeed.
But I also like the underlying theme that he doesn't just see her as an object, as so many others do, but is able to look past all of that (or through all of that) and see the woman underneath.
I'm rooting for him here - I hope they manage to hook up before he makes it to the transport. I think it would be beneficial - for both of them. ;)
Author's Response: Aye. I mean, obviously he reacts to her, but I figured he'd be smart enough to know the difference between a physical response to her pheromones, and an emotional response to her quite attractive personality. Thanks!