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Reviewer: jespah Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jul 2013 04:02 Title: Chapter 1

My, my, my, Scotty! What have you gotten yourself into this time?

I love the unflinching look at the Syndicate - slavery is slavery, even if they're dressed like go-go girls. So Pike as a great Orion emancipator makes his disability as shown in The Menagerie even more tragic, that so many people he could have helped will now go without.



Author's Response: There can be absolutely no doubt in my own mind that Pike's tragedy was hugely so. For so many reasons. Thank you!

Reviewer: Miranda Fave Signed [Report This]
Date: 05 Jul 2013 01:44 Title: Chapter 1

Flip! Didn't expect a cliffhanger ending. Nicely palyed with the carpet pulling.

Scotty as bootlegger. Love it. You can sense he is discomfitted by the mission and yet of everyone he is the one with the best qualifications for the mission - not just the engineering know how - Scotty has actually lived out among the stars on civilian frieghters - any of the other crew would only be pretending whereas Scotty can try ot relive something of his past experiences and bring it to his benefit.

Alas it seems he gets more than he bargained for when he meets Neva. To begin with, I thought Neva was going to be the name of the planet not the contact - but meeting this fascinating Orion woman it seems she is of such a formidable stature, such a character she warrants a titled story. I wonder how she pans out for the rest of the story. Certainly here, she makes an impression on Scotty and the reader. Her bravery has to be admired for she has taken a bold, bold choice getting involved in the line of business she has - taking on the Orions in subterfuge and theft of their technology.

I like the fleshing out of the Orion Syndicate here in that they are made to feel like a kind of threat. They are trying to find means of subverting the Federation's technology - its greatest asset - and by rendering it null they would have any Starfleet vessel soon at their merciless mercy. I like too the fact that by linking Pike to the Orions we give more to his character and career and time in command of the Enterprise and by extension Scotty. (Pike is now in the words and blessing of McGregor an honory Border Dog for his work, dogged persistance and general making life a right pain in the butt for the Orions).



Author's Response: It's usually the Big Three who get to have the fun missions; this time, though, it's the engineer. XD Neva is definitely something unexpected and special; she, like every other OC I've gotten lucky with, walked onto stage fully formed and with her own soul. I think she acquits herself excellently throughout. Captain Pike definitely had a penchant, at least in my universe, for being a thorn in the sides of any number of bad dealers out there. But the Syndicate especially. Thanks so much! I hope the rest of the story is just as much fun for you as this first part.

Reviewer: kes7 Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2013 03:21 Title: Chapter 1

You are just too good, Steff.  The characterizations, all of them, are spot on and you're not just telling a story, you've drawn me into a world.  Neva could easily be a throwaway character, but she's not.  This is just terrific stuff.



Author's Response: Thanks so much, kes!

Reviewer: trekfan Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2013 03:17 Title: Chapter 1

Ah, love this! Okay, as seeing I'm to blame for this monster of a story, let me be the first to offer thanks for starting off with McCoy. Because I love McCoy.

The wordplay between Scott, McCoy, and Kirk was perfect. I could def see Kirk being annoyed that he wasn't going to get any of the action (both kinds, perhaps ;) ) and his body language said as much.

Scott's thoughts on the planet and the way things worked we well placed. Walking down that backalley, thinking to himself, I could see Scott's mind work, the gears a turning as it were.

The bar scene was just that, a bar scene, but where Scott meets Neva brought a smile to my face. Yes, Mr. Scotty, that's why she's an Orion Slave Girl. The interplay between the two was coy but sweet. Seeing Pike referenced and discussed also pleased me to no end ... I'm glad to see he is still so reviled.

 



Author's Response: There are so many Pike-era stories to write yet. I'm really glad you gave me that prompt -- my mind grabbed it and ran with it, and had a lot of fun while doing it.

Reviewer: Lil black dog Signed [Report This]
Date: 16 May 2013 02:56 Title: Chapter 1

Very  much liking this so far.  From McCoy's crotchety concern, to Kirk's palpable disappointment that he hadn't been given the assignment, to Scotty's discomfiture at meeting Neva, to that disappearing once he got his hands on the device.  And the injection of the Pike-era backstory is just win.

Can't wait to see where this is going. :)



Author's Response: Thanks! Blame Trekfan for this little foray; he suggested it, and suddenly, there I was a'typing away.

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