Date: 01 Aug 2014 19:44 Title: Chapter 1
Oh spooky proceedings here with the ominous opener. I return to complete the story and refresh myself on the opening chapter. I like how efficient you are in your writing. I commented before about the three parts to the chapter
1) the mysterious opener, which on re-read I figure to be the flash of radiation on the lifeless Miranda class but its eerie and mysterious begging lots of questions and so provides a terrific hook into the story.
2) the introduction of the Hirogen hunt. Firstly, they are here in the Aplha Quadrant! Eek. And in alliance with Empress Sela. Sometimes I wonder if the Star Trek Online storylines are crazy or just a bit inspired. It's wonderful way to tie in lots of facets of the Trekverse and of course offer the gamers an opportunity to explore them all. However, here we see that it adds a deeper threat to the Hirogen presence and bgs the qquestion what is Sela up to - well no good obviously. And on personal grounds - why would you do that to a Miranda!!!!
3) we turn to Jessica, hovering over the command chair, unwilling to sit in it, haunted by the ghost of her former commander. It's a neat nod to the title of course but again I return to the opening visitor and speculate they'll have a part to play in the ghost story aspect. Who is this ghost? I'm betting on Jessica having to discover that and running into the Hirogen. Cutting her teeth for a first mission? I've a feeling that it is going to be more than that. And Jessica will sorely have to face sitting in that chair - and coming to terms with it and coming to own it and belong there because we know she has her detractors onboard who'd sooner see her out of the chair.
Date: 03 Jun 2014 18:01 Title: Chapter 1
And the opening chapter commences. Jessica is still unsettled about her getting command and certainly deserves to feel that. The Hirogen are operating inside the Bloom and have sumbled upon a Federation starship ... a mystery is certainly here.
Date: 30 May 2013 18:08 Title: Chapter 1
Oh my God! I cannot believe I overlooked this story! It has the Hirogen in it! And there appearance in the Alpha Quadrant does seem rather plausible giving how they drifted across the Delta Quadrant. I've gotta say, this universe you have fashioned around the basic plot or premise of this Star Trek Online game is rather intriguing and a nice refreshing change from other types of Star Trek universes! It feels like it has possibilities and such!
I do like Jessica's apprehension and fear of properly using the former Rafale captain's ready room and living quarters, it just shows how big a gulf Jessica must traverse to truly become the commander of this vessel.
And finally, the Hirogen... You have said in the story description! As I will read any story which adds more depth to some of VOY's most notable aliens!
Date: 08 Apr 2013 18:24 Title: Chapter 1
A Miranda Fave / Lil Black dog Read and Review Challenge response (challenge #5)
Oh, now isn't that a neat set up for the beginning of this tale. Three different scenarios. The ominous prologue, the little teaser that promises much and worse is awaiting the story development. You give little away here but it is more than enough to hook the reader and have them wonder what is going on. Tying that little hook into Bassen's Rift only adding to it for some reason.
Then we have the Hirogen ship I'm guessing with Beta and Alpha titles abounding. Very intriguing, firstly as to why they are here in the Alpah Quadrant - although that may be a Trek Online story development - but it does not negate the pique of interest nor does it deflect the fact that this is a dangerous foe our heroes are going to be challenged with, Formidable hunters and opponents it will be quite a threatening situation for our heroes who surely won't get it as easy as VOY making a cruel villian of the Hirogen and realising their full potential. Looking forward to that. Especially as you show them here to be thinkers too and not just numb-skull hunters.
Then you introduce the captain, our hero of Rafale. Of course, she is actually a reluctant hero we soon learn in a neat bit of character introduction as we learn she is uncomfortable and haunted by memories of the previous captain and the events of the Borg devastation. Already it adds layers to the character and the story and the story title of Ghost Ship. It seems, there's ghosts on this ship the captain will have to put to rest but especially as it may be that there are other hauntings and huntings awaiting the crew. Even as a relatively new reader to your material this works great as an introduction. I feel as though I can step into your story and series with ease in the manner and style of you writing and setting out the expanded universe and the characters you write for.
Lots of glorious little mysteries and set ups to look for and follow. And I look forward to reading more. Great job TemplarSora.
Date: 07 Apr 2013 13:07 Title: Chapter 1
Really nice start, TS. I know Jess' backstory from your challenge-winning story on her (forgive me, the title eludes me at the moment) but don't know much about her formative years, or time at the Academy, so not sure why it would be a surprise for her to get command at this juncture - my failing, not yours, for not being more familiar with your work.
However, I do very much like the air of dread you've associated with it - her unease in her ready room and her quarters, the echoes of the old captain still firmly entrenched in both places.
My time in the reserves was spent driving a desk in the DC area, but I've often wondered how sailors cope with losses and damages on a vessel. For instance, when the Cole was bombed and partially destroyed. Do sailors feel uneasy in those newly-repaired areas of the ship? Are they haunted by the incident that led to the look and feel of that space today? Is a crewman assigned to bunk in a deceased shipmate's space haunted by the specter of that individual?
That's what you've set up here - that feeling of dread, that uncertainty, that feeling Jess has of can-I-keep-the-crew-safe-when-Captain-Mal'Kon-failed-to-do-so? I like that she sleeps on the couch overlooking the bridge, almost as if she feels she can prevent the destruction and loss of life previously visited on the vessel if she can just keep watch over it; keep those personnel manning the bridge in her sight at all times.
Can't wait to see where you take this untested captain, and if she grows into the role she finds so daunting at present.
Author's Response: Thanks for all the reviews! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far! The title of the story you're thinking of is "Interlude - Grown." For a better idea of why Jess is command, I'd recommend going back and reading "Blood Red Dawn" and then "Fix You." "Ghost Ship" would be episode 3 of my little series, following those previous two. It might help fill in a few holes. ^^ Hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
Date: 26 Mar 2013 13:20 Title: Chapter 1
Oh, geez... the Hirogen. That'll be fun for Rafale and her crew to cut their teeth on!
I'm glad to see St. Peter in the center seat, given what she went through at Vega heaven knows she's earned it. Now, whether she can command the respect of the crew... that remains to be seen.
And whatever the heck is the creature in the first passage? As if the Hirogen weren't threat enough!
A terrific start to this tale.