Date: 08 Dec 2012 16:13 Title: Chapter 5
Dysia can't catch a break, can she? Now the Klingons are after her and if the previous chapter is any indication, a possibly corrupted Starfleet captain as well.
I'm getting a sense were this story is going, now that you've tied your two main plot lines together. We already have a sense of what may have happened in another timeline.
Thinks undoubtedly are going to be different this time. For better or worse.
Date: 06 Dec 2012 03:21 Title: Chapter 5
Ai yi yi.
I'm glad she barfed.
That sounds weird, eh?
But I've always thought - you know - why don't people puke when the ground is rushing up to meet 'em? Seems rather unrealistic that everybody would be fine. They wouldn't be.
Well done. Can't wait for the next installment.
Date: 01 Dec 2012 15:38 Title: Chapter 3
This is getting very interesting. A sentient holographic being from the future, traveling back in time to save his creator with whom, incidentally, he is in love with.
A hell of a setup, that's for sure. And then of course we've got that whole betrayed spy forced to go rogue angle which is somehow going to factor into this as well.
I'd be lying if I didn't say that I'm intrigued.
Date: 29 Nov 2012 13:11 Title: Chapter 2
Riker comes across as a very likable, if not a little naive character. Rudolph seemed a little bit too perfect, leaving me to wonder if he has a darker side, especially after he invited her to his quarters ... thats jumping the gun a bit, no?
And what's this mysterious item she can't live without. Interesting stuff, great dialogue.
Date: 28 Nov 2012 20:54 Title: Chapter 1
Intense and somewhat cruel opening but very well written, specifically the way the operative used the Ferengi to get close to her mark.
I was a bit surprised perhaps how ruthless Starfleet Intelligence (I presume) dealt with one of its own operatives here. Of course we don't have the full context here yet and I'm sure it's not unfeasible especially in a slightly darker future in which the Federation carries out high-level, political assassinations.
I'm not overly fond of the title of this series which to me evokes thoughts of corporate synergy but the story itself is off to a terrific start in the best Bourne spy-thriller fashion.
Thanks CeJay-I admit, the title is a bit of weak point inititally but it'll make sense as the story goes along. Glad you found it to you liking :)