Date: 31 Aug 2012 18:55 Title: Chapter 5
A fantastically strong, emotive piece and a little refreshing somehow to see postwar Enterprise. Reed, the O'Brien of the ENTverse.
Ha, yes! A bit put upon, our guy is - and he would have so HATED it if any of that came out in public. But at least he took the advice given him at the end.
Date: 31 Aug 2012 16:33 Title: Chapter 5
Hah! Called it, although I couldn't account for the missing item. Very satisfying piece, though, and oh-so true to human nature, both in the case of the protestors and of Reed and his struggle with shell shock. Excellent work, jespah. My hat's off to you, madam. :D
Thank you very much! I wanted it to be less of a mystery as to the perp versus why, and how to get from Point A to Point Z.
Date: 31 Aug 2012 16:21 Title: Chapter 4
I found this protest scene interesting, but so true to human nature. They have moved from a fear and misunderstanding of various human races to banding together as Terrans to display xenophobic tendencies toward other species within the Federation. Dare I say that's what the group of protestors at the 602 Club found so disturbing about Ruby in the first place? Hmmm...the plot thickens.
My only question - just what happened to those one to two items missing from the box in Malcom's quarters?
My idea is that it's just lost to the ages. It's one of those things he didn't keep track of because he didn't think he'd have to. After all, his encounter with Veylo was years before. Memories deceive us. There is the very real possibility that he discarded the remainder or lost them, gave them away or even someone took them.
Shh don't tell anyone but it's a big, fat red herring.
Date: 31 Aug 2012 15:56 Title: Chapter 3
Wow - you're really putting poor Malcolm through the wringer. I very much like the feel of this - it's like CSI and A Few Good Men meet 22nd century forensics. Very good, very believable, and very engaging.
Thank you - my instinct was to try not to make it too much of a procedural, but also give him a lot of an embarrassing background so there are all sorts of uncomfortable questions that could be asked. And God knows he doesn't want to be spilling about all of that in open court.
Date: 30 Aug 2012 20:11 Title: Chapter 1
Very nice with setting the scene, jespah. Particularly disturbing was Malcom's recurring nightmare, but it's one I suspect many soldiers who have lost friend or colleagues in battle face.
Interested to see where you go with this.
Thanks; the poor guy is definitely affected.