Date: 16 Jun 2013 13:19 Title: Chapter 8
And damn ... this is the storm.
As soon as the identity was revealled to be the Borg they all knew that their number was in all probability up. I like that the Borg had disappeared and considered in the threat possibilities until the last moment. And then the fact they can devastate a fleet of seven ships and a station and take on a new fleet shows just how brutal and relentless the Borg can be. Great to see from the first experience here of the Borg being treated a truly credible threat.
And damn, for the ship and crew things got bad real quick. A brutal assault and all that remains of the senior crew must assemble in Engineering. I think a stark reality is about to be delivered to all.
Date: 20 Jun 2012 00:50 Title: Chapter 8
That’s pretty much the last thing you want to hear over the PA, aside from, “Abandon ship!”
You really captured the helplessness of those below decks and not immediately involved in the fight from a bridge-perspective. At least Wirstowx is still standing, as I think they’ll be needing a true warrior’s assistance sooner than later.
Really great drama here, and I loved Wirstowx’s reflection on the scent of fear his comrades were unconsciously giving off.
Date: 18 Jun 2012 08:34 Title: Chapter 8
I'm kind of wondering how Wirstowx got there so fast. I'm glad he did - it's just, it feels like a bit of the process or the timing was a little unclear. I think it's more because the last we see of him before he gets to Jess is that he's at his station on the Bridge. Perhaps just a fast line where the captain yells something like, "Wirstowx, get down there!" ? I dunno, just a thought.
Author's Response: yeah...it was a little odd to me too when I was re-reading it before I posted it. My main thing with this was that, if the main couple characters I have (if I haven't spoiled it yet which ones those are, lol) aren't around, they won't know what happened elsewhere...and (unfortunetly, as in this case) neither will we. The best I can offer is that Wirstowx was called out as soon as the conversation with the science officer was finished, and he made his way the couple decks down while the scene in the lab finished and the scene in engineering took place. :( I might revisit it.