Date: 16 Jun 2013 08:02 Title: Chapter 4
That was a fairly (no mightily) intense battle scene. All within the confines of the bridge - as in you kept the action and POV to those on the bridge and the surely claustrophobic feeling one would get in that situation, your world view narrowing down to the screens and information in front of you masked by smoke, fumes and noise and melted plastic and chaos and restrained panic or fear. When you probably wish for sight and vision of the bigger scene yet necessity means focus on the small. Very well done.
And after the Merveille's short quick affair in the previous chapter where Justine never even got to finishing prep of the sickbay before things were over we are walloped with a big ole blasted to hell scene here. No let up. No quick victory or easy win. This si going to be hard and brutal. Nicely played. From the build up to making me think the horror was first going to befall the Merveille. The rug got pulled on me.
Date: 06 Jun 2012 17:18 Title: Chapter 4
Really enjoying this story, especially the focus on the junior officers and the great, naturally flowing dialogue.
Hope Jess is ok after that battle. Would be a shame if her first bridge assignment turns out to be her last. But I'm sure that's not the first time that has happened. It's a risky job, after all.
Author's Response: Well, sure, people go flipping over the command chair all the time. :) Definitely sucks to be the poor soul stuck withOUT a seat/seat belt, though. This is why our parents tell us to buckle up in the car - in case we get attacked by unknown aliens. :P