Date: 16 Jun 2013 07:49 Title: Chapter 3
Ok, I love you for the OPs console scene. Cos, well I love stuff like that. I've written something akin to that though I was remiss on the vital element of personnel manning the stations. Now that you've written it so it seems so damned obvious and I'm kicking myself. (Grrrrrrrr!!!) From that you should take a complient that reading your take makes me mad because you throw in wonderous little details and thoughts about the working of the ship that brings the whole thing alive. I love it.
Then back to Vega - it seems something peculiar is happening. I rather believe our enemy is trying to gather intel on Starfleet by launching unmanned probes and testing the response and tactical strength. A very bad feeling is growing in the pit of the stomach as to the ultimate end for Justine and the Merville. Again, really loving the build up to this.
Date: 01 Jun 2012 23:33 Title: Chapter 3
Well, hormones are running amok with the junior officers, but it appears Jess can hold her own in that regard. Again, the social dynamics here offer terrific insights into the various characters.
I'm interested to find out what Rafale has discovered.