Date: 16 Jun 2013 07:00 Title: Chapter 1
What an unusual way to introduce a story and a character. However, it gives a nice leisurely introduction to Jessica and already has the reader warming up to her, having a touch of loyalty already to this cheery, chipper gal who is having to play on the lower rung of the science department. But it seems she is not her only friend or ensign playing such a part in the fleet. It might well be universal to get handed the raw deal. No wonder they miss the Academy (how very true - you miss college because friends could just get together and hang out).
You give a nice lower decks vibe to the proceedings as well as give a picture of the larger fleet and some of the behind the scenes stuff that goes on a ship. For example, the guys on the bridge getting all the screen time calling down to the unsung heroes for the information that makes them look good.
And of course, the weird contact thing is bound to be trouble so despite the warm and fuzzy one gets the impression that there is something in the offing.
Date: 19 Oct 2012 09:27 Title: Chapter 1
A very good story in that stuck to the perspective of the 'lower decks', plus what glimpses there were of the Borg you nailed them. You also brought in some interesting situations like Seurer being completely out of her element and thus someone of lower ranking taking charge (that being Jessica). What I like about it is how Jessica, with no command experience, simply followed her heart to protect the Merveille and her two friends. While Seurer was also following her heart but fear got the best of her. A very clever little contrast indeed.
My own complaint with the story was that Jessica, Bridget and Justine sometimes seemed a bit too emotional or a bit too relaxed about things. I guess that can be explained away by youthful exuberance and lack of experience.
Still despite this, I would give this story 4.5 stars out of five if the old staring system still remained on this site.
So nice one for packing in so much with a story less than 20000 words! A rather engaging story indeed...