Date: 11 May 2013 21:32 Title: Chapter 1
Well, first: DAMN.
That out of the way, I have to say I read this with wide eyes. Each turn just kept getting worse and worse. I was waiting for this to get better but, alas, not so much for the crew of the NX-01. I was sad to see Travis be the one to bite the dust. I don't remember a whole lot from Bounty but I do remember the decon scene (everyone made a fuss over it as I recall). You took that and spun it off into a compelling story.
Seeing the destruction T'Pol wraught while in pon farr was shocking. I didn't think she'd go as far as she did after Phlox and Travis and STILL need more. Seeing Hoshi kind of check out was sad, but it makes some sense to me as she and Travis were kinda close. Reed feeling guilty was also a good touch as, in that situation, I would too.
Seeing Archer call it quits sucked. A lot. I know he lost Travis but I would have hoped he'd stick it out to continue the mission. It was good of Archer to hand out all those promotions and I especially liked what he did for Hadon. She seemed to like him a lot and I was fearing her injury would bar her from any further Starfleet service. Good to see Archer come to her defense in his log and go to bat for her whenever she wanted him to.
Nice job.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much - I had written this for a TrekBBS what-if style challenge and it got pretty much no love.
In another tale, Haddon gets to act on her attraction (and of course she was Chip's captive audience in the gerbil story).
Thank you for reading!