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Reviewer: FalseBill Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Sep 2013 11:36 Title: Gainful

Malcolm Mum has got a job, answering a music star fan mail!
Clearly not something I would have though of as key to the war effort, still every job needs filling in those dark times.
Well this was an interesting job choice and the work in coming up with the characters and the example mail questions and answers.

Still we see that Stuart Reed is an old stick in the mud even at home with his love one.
I think we should have a follow up story of Malcolm reaction to his mum finally getting a job.

Still I do wonder how working in Germany and living in Malaysia Kota Bharu must play havoc with Malcolm mum body clock.

Author's Response:

I think she'll be okay - but yeah, it's work! She's got a job!

I had thought about, particularly, the Second World War, and all of those calls for people to entertain the troops. It doesn't seem like the war effort, but it is. Someone has to field all of those inquiries. Thank you for reading.

Reviewer: SLWalker Signed [Report This]
Date: 21 Aug 2013 02:08 Title: Gainful

I've already said all I can about showing v. telling for the moment, though I'll reiterate it for this chapter as well. But otherwise, I really loved Mary's impressions of what's going on around her and the delightful sort of ending there. Plenty of potential for humor, in this job, too. And, obviously, poignancy.

Author's Response:

The main thing I wanted to get across was her getting there. But you're right; there's description that's missing here.

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