Date: 28 Sep 2013 14:47 Title: Harvest
What a nice introduction story for Lili O’Day on her first day on the NX-01. I felt that it was nice gesture by Captain Archer and Chef Will to have a special lunchtime meet and greet.
So Malcolm got his wish a pretty little blond sous-chef ;)
I do love that line by Jay, if we have to wrestle the Xindi ultimate weapon to the ground we will.
I think you got Doctor Phlox interest in the Red Sox and baseball from her cap despite knowing nothing and yes I bet that extra wide smile could startle those not use to it.
The gesture of offering to make sweet potato pie to help remind him of his destroyed home, show the kindness that I associate with Lili.
I did enjoy Travis light heart flirting with Lili and the start of her infatuation with Jay that will lead her to Doug in the arc end.
T’Pol “Naturally” to the offer of plomeek broth customises to her preferences felt logical.
Last but not least Malcolm Reed, who has the honestly to admit his mother cooking of plum pudding is bad, and fit in that series tic bit that he likes pineapple.
Another excellent short story from your keyboard.
You are so very kind.
I love first meetings and of course this is a rather auspicious one. Lili looks this way, Jay looks that way, Malcolm looks another way. Blink you'll miss it, but this is how it all starts.
I think Phlox's grins would startle me, too.
Date: 20 Aug 2013 23:40 Title: Harvest
Lili eyes Jay, Malcolm eyes Lili, and thus seeds are planted that do quite a bit of vining before bloom. Even so, this is a good introduction. Using the multiple POV format worked well here, and it did read a bit whirlwind, but that worked in the tone and context here.