Date: 28 Sep 2013 08:57 Title: Act 4
Now things go pear shape, Made sense that the Orions would target the Vulcans and use a small local jammer ship to allow them to use their computer virus and grab some Vulcans for slaves.
Glad you’ve kept sh’Aleen and Brian still having leftover issues from the previous chapters and it feel good for Brian to point out he is her boss.
I surprise the Captain trust Hadley to sort out the Horizon, when he previously demote her for stupid antics.
I was shook at the Whiston torpedo hit and crippling the Horizon warp drive nacelle, and yet in battle that sort of thing sadly happens so I found it a realistic error, but Mayfield will be doing some extra tactical training in the near future.
What an awkward position for the Captain, chase the raiders to rescue 23 Vulcans or protect the Horizon other 327 Vulcans from a future further raids. I trust he going to point out to Captain Mayweather he doesn’t take orders from the ECS.
Date: 15 Jul 2013 13:46 Title: Act 4
This would be crunch time! Damn! Things went south quickly and badly! You nicely amped up the tension after another casual off duty scene to lull the reader and then the confusion of the raider attack itself. The Orions obviously have sophisticated tech and possibly an inside 'man' given the dormant virus made the ship entirely susceptible and one wonders if the Whitson has herself been made susceptible by the virus. This is also a bad loss for Brian - maybe his firing at the Horizon can be explained by a virus programme - but he's likely to blame himself bad and it may be the captain will too as he doesn't suffer fools gladly from what I've seen.
The Orion threat proved to be very real and now the questions is what cn be done about it. The Orions may have brought on a whole heap of trouble upon themselves methinks.
Points to make here are: I'm not discounting Hadley having some part to play in things; Raal is made of awesome for his command chair line; and that was a neat tense battle scene.
Date: 14 Jul 2013 21:34 Title: Act 4
Oh, crap! Everything just hit the fan! You do a terrific job ratcheting up the tension here, too. And yeah, in a world where Vulcan was decimated, it's a pretty big deal when twenty-three of them go missing. Holy crap. Well played!