Date: 28 Sep 2013 07:57 Title: Act 2
Well played with the drop out of warp scene, I did like that the sub-space radio silence was due to the ECS Horizon not having a modern another communication set.
Did like that someone had the smarts to fit transport inhibitors to make raids harder.
I felt the ECS/Starfleet and refugees mayor Talak first introduction did felt well balance. I did like that Doctor De la Reina was more concern with treating the injury than attending the briefing.
Also like that the ECS crews are still slightly adverse to calling Starfleet for helping, despite the old family links. I bet it bad on cargo ship with that many people/Vulcans, I feel the idea that the Nero/Romulans target the large refugee ships also feels right.
Date: 15 Jul 2013 13:18 Title: Act 2
Ooh interesting. So they are going to offer aid and assistance to the Vulcan refugees and nothing bad will now happen to them. (yeah right). First, I like the call out to ENT here with the Horizon and Mayweathers. I noted it in the first act but thought perhaps it might be a name drop but no you actually are honouring it which is great. You also gave a good sense of travelling by cargo freighter with the cramped conditions and mention of the zero-grav difficulties running 24/7. Small details like that help to authenticate a story and universe and you do that really well.
The characters all come across quite well here in the second act with them remianing consistent from the first and here we get to see Rick and Tyler acting in tandem. In itself it is a neat trait and it was great that you actually demonstrated it in the casual manner you did to flesh it out and no doubt it is something very valuable in a crisis situation. The other characters remain very interesting but poor ole Brian and his poor choice for a stalker material! That was hilarious but I'm also wondering is this going to lead to strife down the line. And it may be that others have an issue with her given her lack of assistance ot the good ole doc (who although we have only had fleeting opportunity to meet her is my kind of gal and character - I'm thinking she is going to be awesome).
Date: 14 Jul 2013 19:27 Title: Act 2
I love the Mayweather connection. And I like the care with which you paint the details. The use of an original crew is never easy, yet you continue to paint a very likeable, understandable one that seems real and established, even though I'm coming to this story cold. I like that the Whiston isn't shiny new and I like that the Horizon is an old-school freighter, and its backstory.