Date: 01 Nov 2011 19:29 Title: Chapter 1 (of 4)
A very bizarre, surreal story indeed. I don't know how many of the old Trek novels you've read, but in some ways I am reminded of the whacked-out feeling I got from reading John M. Ford's novel How Much For Just the Planet? where Trek trappings are used mainly to amuse.
Where I have some qualms, though--and please understand this is not unique to you, but a sentiment I have expressed to at least two other authors I can think of on this board and to the official Treklit authors (though in their case it was a thinly-disguised pastiche of a real public official)--is the incorporation of real, living persons into fanfic. Especially when they are being killed, and I have to admit that was a real turnoff for me.
Author's Response: I wondered when someone would pick on the Abrams thing. I can look on the bright side and think at least you didn't vote for it. Though I don't aim to turn-on or turn-off people with my writing. I thought I crafted the fatal phaser blast without it seeming...as if he had been killed. Never mind. Yes, I've read the novel and I can't say it came to mind. The Prisoner did. Thanks I guess.
Date: 26 Oct 2011 12:57 Title: Chapter 4
Nice ending with Q and the Q Council. And the adventure continues, unfettered by remakes... LOL.
Author's Response: If only it were that simple. Yes, I suppose the Q Council was an easy thing after essentially doing the 'Reset Button' but I always picture the Q as being THE power in the galaxy who would know everything before, after they happen. my thanks again
Date: 26 Oct 2011 10:59 Title: Chapter 1 (of 4)
Nice breaking of the fourth wall there, Mack. Of course, with the ambiguity presented in TNG's "Ship in a Bottle" and DS9's "Far Beyond the Stars". This line-- "Even if it means ruining people’s childhood memories, or at least ‘destroying’ everything that they have known."-- was simply hilarious.
I remember, after I saw the movie for the first time, joking that Daniels or Braxton could just fix things. Erasing Jar-Jar Abrams might also work, but then there'd be no "Fringe" in 2008.
Author's Response: Fringe would be a worthy sacrifice but such are sacrifices. Well, it was worth a punt in this story. I don't know or care enough for the Abramsverse to do a proper story set in that reality. Thus this weird effort. thanks for the review.
Date: 21 Oct 2011 16:27 Title: Chapter 1 (of 4)
Nice job, Mack - I think it turned out very well, and was definitely a unique take on the JJ-verse.
It was nice to see Gary Mitchell figure prominently into the story. In a way, it's a shame he was killed off in WNMHGB - while Spock and McCoy came to represent the practical and compassionate sides of Kirk's personality respectively, Gary Mitchell - had the character survived - could have easily become the 'dark side,' presenting those not-so-pleasant options in tense situations. We glimpsed this evil side to Gary, despite the fact that extenuating circumstances brought it to the fore - but it could have been interesting to see how this trusted friend contributed to the dynamic that made up Kirk's command style.
Like Gary, this made my head spin as I tried to keep track of who was from what timeline and what impact they would have on the final result, but overall it was a fun, light-hearted romp into the strange world of time travel and alternate universes.
The twist at the end was particularly good - didn't see that coming at all. ;-)
Author's Response: thank you kindly LBD. I've always liked Mitchell and as you say we never got chance to see much of him. Hints of his friendship with Kirk. Who knows what AbramsTrek's Mitchell is like? I fear, a Finnegan style character but who knows? My thanks and indeed for the twist to the end :)
Date: 15 Oct 2011 07:07 Title: Chapter 4
That was quite surreal! Surreal stories have their charm--it's very, very hard to guess what would happen next and this story was not different in this matter: you surprised me quite a few times.
A very interesting approach :)
Author's Response: thank you. Yes it was quite weird, I sort of view it like The Prisoner or in terms of Trek like "Ship in a Bottle", "Frame of Mind" etc. I'll look into others soon, cybercafes don't afford such luxuries.