Date: 19 Jul 2012 08:50 Title: Spring Thaw
Nice start. A lot of sex going on, but hey...it keeps it human. I'm not sure if this a sequel to another story, or if this is a unique story to its own. But I hope you go into the science as to how they know what the "true" past is supposed to look like.
Thanks! It's a sequel but I try to keep them fairly stand-alone so that the reader doesn't have to go back and read a bajillion words in order to get what I'm talking about.
There's a little on the science and, well, it's imperfect. So how can you really know?
Date: 20 Mar 2012 12:55 Title: A Long, Long Time Ago
So the plane crashed-not sure where all that is going.
Well - Rick has to put back the original history. Which he's done.
And now he's gotta go back, where there's a dead job candidate and a file that needs to be deciphered ....
Date: 19 Mar 2012 12:27 Title: A Long, Long Time Ago
OK, he made it. Funny, just watched La Bamba yesterday. Weird coincidence, I guess.
Ha, too funny. It takes some doing, these days, to find the real Ritchie Valens and the real Buddy Holly on Youtube, rather than Lou Diamond Phillips/Los Lobos and Gary Busey!
Date: 01 Mar 2012 16:04 Title: First Born
Very nice, jespah. A temporal paradox reminiscent of 'A Sound of Thunder,' but more easily repaired and without the dark ramifications of the former. I love your style - the dialogue flowed easily and was very true to life.
Rick's concern - even love - for Jun was perfect and just how we'd expect someone in that position to behave.
Also love the description of the 'shift' - how the lecturer paused, seemed to gather herself, and then began speaking again, telling the same story with a slightly different spin. Very effective.
All in all, a perfect fit for the challenge. :D
Date: 23 Feb 2012 07:18 Title: First Born
Wow that was one weird intriguing plot about temporal mechanics, messing around with the timeline and playing God. I bet it took you some time to tease out the timeline consequences...
Thank you. You should definitely be left with the impression of – they just negotiate around any little problem, no matter what it is, and you can find yourself questioning the present day.
Date: 02 Nov 2011 12:59 Title: Temper
Not sure how these relationships work but an interesting insight into a less wooden Malcolm Reed.
It kind of worked out in a previous story (Together) - where he and Lili, well, they get together, as do Doug and Melissa.
For Malcolm, I wanted him to have someone he could really let his hair down with and be himself, and not be so formal.
Thank you for reviewing.